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10.12.02
No way, there is no way
My heart only gets heavier
No chance, there is no chance
Gravity is not my friend
I don’t know what to say
My heart, I wish beat steadier
Just pierce it with your lance
Sanity will be the end
10.12.02
My breathing deeper
My thoughts on you
Your way is cheaper
My way is true
I feel like singing
But cannot speak
My eyes are gleaming
It’s you I seek
Your thoughts are pure
Yet you are not
I am your cure
It’s me you’ve caught
You mustn’t know
The way I feel
My eyes wont show
And never will
No way, there is no way
My heart only gets heavier
No chance, there is no chance
Gravity is not my friend
I don’t know what to say
My heart, I wish beat steadier
Just pierce it with your lance
Sanity will be the end
10.12.02
My breathing deeper
My thoughts on you
Your way is cheaper
My way is true
I feel like singing
But cannot speak
My eyes are gleaming
It’s you I seek
Your thoughts are pure
Yet you are not
I am your cure
It’s me you’ve caught
You mustn’t know
The way I feel
My eyes wont show
And never will
Just wrote these 2 short poems.... I have no one to explain too how I feel right now, so, this is how it comes out on paper.
© 2002 - 2024 richieZ
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Shit i agree with symonx.. Not too sure about the first poem up here.. As you said, you had noone to explain to how you felt at the time you wrote these poems so perhaps that is the reason why the 1st one doesnt make too much sense to myself personally.. "Gravity is not my friend"? Hrmm not sure about that line of the poem..
I do like how you wrote it tho.. The way it rhymes.. Not your typical sequence you'd find in a poem.. But then again, there's plenty of poems out there that don't EVEN rhyme, so..
As for the second one.. Pretty sure i kno who this one is about.. does her name start with an "L"? heh.. I like the first four lines of this second poem, but as to the line that says "Your way is cheaper, my way is true".. A bit confused on that one.. But then again, I'M not the one who wrote the poem so you're the one who better understands it.. I dig it tho.. U sure do sound like U miss her bro.. But you kno that only U can take action on it.. NEwayz good shit Richie..
bro
I do like how you wrote it tho.. The way it rhymes.. Not your typical sequence you'd find in a poem.. But then again, there's plenty of poems out there that don't EVEN rhyme, so..
As for the second one.. Pretty sure i kno who this one is about.. does her name start with an "L"? heh.. I like the first four lines of this second poem, but as to the line that says "Your way is cheaper, my way is true".. A bit confused on that one.. But then again, I'M not the one who wrote the poem so you're the one who better understands it.. I dig it tho.. U sure do sound like U miss her bro.. But you kno that only U can take action on it.. NEwayz good shit Richie..
bro